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  • razor
    Member
    • Dec 2007
    • 78

    #16
    Originally posted by Starcadia
    Not trying to be a know-it-all, but Haiku form is as follows:

    First line = 5 syllables
    Second line = 7 syllables
    Third line = 5 syllables

    That is true if you are writting in Japanese. In English you should stay as close to the syllable count as possible, but style and content are more important. Being off by a syllable in a line, here or there, is acceptable in English. Of course, sticking with 5-7-5 is the goal if the Haiku does not suffer with the loss or addition of a syllable. I would rather read a GREAT 6-7-5 than a good 5-7-5.

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    • razor
      Member
      • Dec 2007
      • 78

      #17
      Sipping on my beer
      Snus nectar slips through my teeth
      Marriage in heaven

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      • snusfather
        Member
        • Jun 2008
        • 227

        #18
        Hand bakeing Ettan
        My dog and I watch the moon
        Crisp wind blows dry leaves

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        • cosmokramer
          Member
          • Sep 2008
          • 26

          #19
          I love Ted Koppel
          Informative and witty.
          Very super voice.

          Go tampa bay rays
          Thanks for beating the redsox
          God I hate Boston.

          Chicago bears, Yes!
          Beat the vikings by 1 score.
          That's why we're first place

          Beans, beans, magic fruit
          ya know, the more that you eat,
          the more you will toot.

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          • airwoodstock
            Banned Users
            • Aug 2008
            • 340

            #20
            Pris of snus in lip
            A pinch of snuff in the nose
            Heaven, sheer Heaven!

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            • Premium Parrots
              Super Moderators
              • Feb 2008
              • 9760

              #21
              最近「ウェブは人間の考え方に似ている」と思います。いろんなアイデアから"リンク"がありますね。今日またインター ネットを使いすぎ、ゴールデンバット(昨日のポスト)と無頼派(9月のポスト)の"リンク"を見つけまし た。太宰 治 (だざい おさむ)はゴールデンバットが好きそうでした(ここに見て、勉強に成りました)。それと、「無頼派」の一 人でした。 8)


              is that traditional enuff?
              Grant me the serenity to accept the things I cannot change, the courage to change the things I can, and the wisdom to hide the bodies of the people I killed because they were annoying......





              I've been wrong lots of times.  Lots of times I've thought I was wrong only to find out that I was right in the beginning.


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              • RobME
                Member
                • Jul 2008
                • 387

                #22
                Haiku... to a new addiction... ummm... sport.

                Snuff fragrance gentle
                Whispers Autumn to my breath
                Neti pot stands near.

                Oh my nose my nose
                it calls to a handkerchief
                tissue I miss you.

                a choo, god bless you!
                it sucks being sick today
                but it's just a ruse.

                snus snus go away
                come on back another day
                when the snuff is gone.

                ok so I took a few creative liberties...

                8)

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                • cocsp2002
                  Member
                  • Jul 2008
                  • 509

                  #23
                  Citrus and pepper
                  Crisp fall awakens senses
                  Pris of General.




                  Had to stay true to my brand...sure is hard when the name is 3 syllables though!

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                  • snusfather
                    Member
                    • Jun 2008
                    • 227

                    #24
                    Originally posted by Premium Parrots
                    最近「ウェブは人間の考え方に似ている」と思います。いろんなアイデアから"リンク"がありますね。今日またインター ネットを使いすぎ、ゴールデンバット(昨日のポスト)と無頼派(9月のポスト)の"リンク"を見つけまし た。太宰 治 (だざい おさむ)はゴールデンバットが好きそうでした(ここに見て、勉強に成りました)。それと、「無頼派」の一 人でした。 8)


                    is that traditional enuff?
                    :lol: I wish I could read Japanese :lol:

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                    • airwoodstock
                      Banned Users
                      • Aug 2008
                      • 340

                      #25
                      Originally posted by Premium Parrots
                      最近「ウェブは人間の考え方に似ている」と思います。いろんなアイデアから"リンク"がありますね。今日またインター ネットを使いすぎ、ゴールデンバット(昨日のポスト)と無頼派(9月のポスト)の"リンク"を見つけまし た。太宰 治 (だざい おさむ)はゴールデンバットが好きそうでした(ここに見て、勉強に成りました)。それと、「無頼派」の一 人でした。 8)


                      is that traditional enuff?
                      Hey Parrots, you forgot to add オフロードコーヒー/バニラ今すぐ! to the end!!!

                      :lol: :lol: :lol: :shock:

                      Just Kidding!!

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                      • Premium Parrots
                        Super Moderators
                        • Feb 2008
                        • 9760

                        #26
                        opps..........sorry. my bad........ Farm and Fleet bound
                        Grant me the serenity to accept the things I cannot change, the courage to change the things I can, and the wisdom to hide the bodies of the people I killed because they were annoying......





                        I've been wrong lots of times.  Lots of times I've thought I was wrong only to find out that I was right in the beginning.


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                        • airwoodstock
                          Banned Users
                          • Aug 2008
                          • 340

                          #27
                          Originally posted by Premium Parrots
                          opps..........sorry. my bad........ Farm and Fleet bound
                          LOL.....

                          Farm and Barn!!!! My second home! I've got one about 2 miles from me! I get all my Carhartt stuff there.

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                          • Juxtaposer
                            Member
                            • Dec 2007
                            • 94

                            #28
                            Bake a pris of snus
                            and then shove it up your lip
                            nothing bothers now

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                            • danielan
                              Member
                              • Apr 2010
                              • 1514

                              #29
                              It's time for more thread archeology!

                              Bump.

                              Haiku Thread:

                              It is time to bump
                              Reviving another snus thread
                              Please post your snus poem.

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                              • MojoQuestor
                                Member
                                • Sep 2009
                                • 2344

                                #30
                                You will not catch me
                                Posting in a haiku thread.
                                It gives me a rash.

                                --Itchynow Kamazuma

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